When responding to Jennifer Garnes’ peer response essay, I chose to employ a new style of responding. This time I tried to stray away from my usual, “all praise”, motif and delve into a more specific style. This time I wanted to be more directive on the things I thought weren’t working and offer some suggestions for change. It was honestly a little bit hard to do. It is definitely not something that comes natural to me when I am responding. I’m not sure if it is for the better or for the worse. I do think it may help Jennifer out more in the long run though because at least now she knows of some areas where she may fix some things if she likes.
Revision tasks for my own Essay-
1. Add more sentences to my introduction to make it stronger.
2.Try and use different transition words in my second paragraph.
3. Go back and add commas where they are needed.
4. Maybe make my conclusion stronger
5. Check my paper over for grammatical errors
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